Ideas

The writer is writing about a girl who is eleven but she does not feel eleven. It is her birthday today. And a red sweater that does not belong to her.

Organization

The writer pulls us in by using emotion and real life language.

Voice

The writer reveals emotion by repeating the same words.

Word Choice

The writer uses real life language.

Sentences

The sentences are short.

Conventions

The writer use’s constant grammar and uses the same grammar over an over to make the reader want to carry on reading.